Can anyone help proof read my book report?

I need to make sure the sentence strucure is okay :

Actually your sentence structure is good. I modified the beginning of the third sentence for variation. I also suggested some changes in what I thought were grammatical errors.

Louisa Bryce is a woman of many secrets. Her life takes a turn when she stumbles upon Anthony Stalbridge, who is in search of the person that killed his beloved Fiona. Quickly joining together, the two solve the mysteries of the unexplained suicides and blackmail scandals in London. They speculate that Elwin Hastings has been the sole killer until they learn that his late wife never really threw herself into the river. Money-hungry Victoria Hastings, the first wife of Elwin, had survived an attempted murder and come back to society under an assumed name. In the end, Louisa and Anthony are able to put both Hastings to justice while solving many other murders along the way. They gradually fall madly in love during their investigations, and Anthony asks Louisa’s hand in marriage.

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The Justice Riders: Book 1 $19.59 General Sherman commissions Ezra Justice to form a secret band of cavaliers who will help end the war….

The Victoria Vanishes: Bryant and May, Book 6 (Unabridged) $19.59 One night, Arthur Bryant witnesses a drunken lady coming out of a pub. The next morning, she is found dead at the exact spot where their paths crossed. Disturbingly, the pub has vanished….

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1985 Establishments: Canadian Auto Workers, Social Weather Stations, South Asian Association for Regional Cooperation, Beta Upsilon Chi $15.93 Used – Chapters: Canadian Auto Workers, Social Weather Stations, South Asian Association for Regional Cooperation, Beta Upsilon Chi, Center for Immigration Studies, United States Strategic Command, GEnie, MIT Media Lab, Victoria Miro Gallery, Washington Institute for Near East Policy, Justice for Janitors, Veterans for Peace, Ministry of Human Resource Development, The WELL, Discover Card, Wonderland Sydney, Blackthorne Publishing, Washington Institute for Near East Policy/Sandbox, Manitoba Hock

1985 Establishments: Canadian Auto Workers, Social Weather Stations, South Asian Association for Regional Cooperation, Beta Upsilon Chi $15.93 New – Chapters: Canadian Auto Workers, Social Weather Stations, South Asian Association for Regional Cooperation, Beta Upsilon Chi, Center for Immigration Studies, United States Strategic Command, GEnie, MIT Media Lab, Victoria Miro Gallery, Washington Institute for Near East Policy, Justice for Janitors, Veterans for Peace, Ministry of Human Resource Development, The WELL, Discover Card, Wonderland Sydney, Blackthorne Publishing, Washington Institute for Near East Policy/Sandbox, Manitoba Hocke

1985 Establishments: Canadian Auto Workers, Social Weather Stations, South Asian Association for Regional Cooperation, Beta Upsilon Chi $23.99 Used – Chapters: Canadian Auto Workers, Social Weather Stations, South Asian Association for Regional Cooperation, Beta Upsilon Chi, Center for Immigration Studies, United States Strategic Command, GEnie, MIT Media Lab, Victoria Miro Gallery, Washington Institute for Near East Policy, Justice for Janitors, Veterans for Peace, Ministry of Human Resource Development, The WELL, Discover Card, Wonderland Sydney, Blackthorne Publishing, Washington Institute for Near East Policy/Sandbox, Manitoba Hock

1985 Establishments: Canadian Auto Workers, Social Weather Stations, South Asian Association for Regional Cooperation, Beta Upsilon Chi $23.99 New – Chapters: Canadian Auto Workers, Social Weather Stations, South Asian Association for Regional Cooperation, Beta Upsilon Chi, Center for Immigration Studies, United States Strategic Command, GEnie, MIT Media Lab, Victoria Miro Gallery, Washington Institute for Near East Policy, Justice for Janitors, Veterans for Peace, Ministry of Human Resource Development, The WELL, Discover Card, Wonderland Sydney, Blackthorne Publishing, Washington Institute for Near East Policy/Sandbox, Manitoba Hocke

A Memoir of George Higinbotham, an Australian Politician and Chief Justice of Victoria $23.47 New